Writing paragraph two of an emotive narrative scene in 'Whale Rider'

The emotive scene is written over two paragraphs and it is important to demonstrate a change in atmosphere. Using a range of sentence types (simple, compound and complex) improves text flow and cohesion. Precise and ambitious vocabulary, including 'show-not-tell' language, is used to convey an emotive atmosphere. Direct speech and characters' internal thoughts are used to convey their emotions. Oral rehearsal before writing helps to structure grammatically correct sentences and check for sense.