Writing paragraph one of an emotive narrative scene in 'Whale Rider'

This emotive scene is written over two paragraphs and it is important to demonstrate a change in atmosphere across them. Using a range of sentence types (simple, compound and complex) improves text flow and cohesion. Precise and ambitious vocabulary, including 'show-not-tell' language, is used to convey an emotive atmosphere. ‘Show-not-tell’ shows a character’s feelings with description of their actions, body language and facial expressions. Oral rehearsal before writing helps to structure grammatically correct sentences and check for sense.